yes there are 8 syllables in the second line but I wanted to extend the flow to convey the pain and tiredness implicit in the gospel narrative and as with all poetic forms I feel some flexibility can be justified. The modern haiku is less strict than the original japanese form but even this showed a fluidity of pattern that was used to such great effect. A pattern of 5,7,5, defines the haiku but must only be a guide or else the creativity of the form will be lost. Thank you for your comment, it made me look again at my work and revisit the creative process more critically. I still feel justified in using 8 but to conform how about (and weary feet. Rejection) for the second line.
